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Just A Troubled Teen by ~eNJay:iconeNJay:





Like a flower losing it's petals.
Like a tree losing it's leaves.
I saw you floating,
Slowly fading away with the breeze.
No-one else could tell.
No-one else could see.
The happy little girl,
Turn into a troubled teen.
That Saturday morning,
At 10 o'clock on the dot.
I felt it in my stomach,
I knew a gun was shot.
I ran into the street,
And let out a scream.
I pinched myself,
Hoping it was a dream.
When I got there,
I knew it was too late.
The blood surrounded you,
Like a dark red lake.
Why did you do this?
Why did you leave?
Why did you float away with that breeze?
You could've told someone.
You didn't have to lie.
But most of all,
You could've said goodbye.
©2004-2009 ~eNJay
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:iconsashimidragon:
Evidently you have recently loved and lost. Am I right? The last three poems you posted have been about loving and getting hurt. Thus implying that you are experiencing these feelings. This is a very lovely poem. It flows well. You are a wonderful writer. (Am too lazy to comment on the other poems, but I read them and I liked them). ^_^
:iconkame:
Very nice, I especially like the last part. Since twice I've never gotten to say good bye
:iconenjay:
thank you....actually no, not recently.......but im going through old poems, and there was a time where i did love and loose.......thank you again:D

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thank you for your comment...:)

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very nice. i like the rhyming a lot. nice theme too.
:iconwhitesilkrose101:
:hug: This one is so beautiful. *tear* I really trully like this one. Def. a fav+

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Love hurts, yet we can't live without it. It's like oxygen, slowly killing us, but without it we'd already be dead.
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thank you very much...:hug:

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thank you :)

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welcome :hug:

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c('';) ('';) oh look...a bunny

Love hurts, yet we can't live without it. It's like oxygen, slowly killing us, but without it we'd already be dead.
:iconruchy:
ahh your poetry lets me down sometimes! i read it and enjoy it so much...but i always feel like it gets cut off too soon!!
your flow and words are just so well taken care of....makes me just wish it was longer...more in depth...
ah well still really good

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